Wednesday, September 23, 2015

Revised Introduction and Conclusion

Rough Draft Intro

"Baca’s story Coming into Language right off the bat refers to how Baca had no real prior

experience with literature and how important it ended up being to him within his life. This

correlates to my life in the way that my Father and Mother made things very clear how important

reading should and would be for me throughout my life. I was always constantly told at any point

I could ask my Mom or Dad if they’d read a story with or for me.  When I began to actually be

able to read by myself and being in the position where I was at my Father’s house, I’d have two

to three mandatory thirty minute timed session worth of reading. Sometimes I’d turn the egg

timer down a few minutes, sometimes I read even after it went off. Although Baca unfortunately

never had such luxurious opportunities as he was resigned to a less enjoyable method of learning

about language which happened to be prison. Within his metaphorical and literal prison, he

learned the importance of writing and reading. Literature filled a void in his mind and his heart."


Intro Paragraph Revised

"Literature promotes a form of escapism and education that is essential to a reader or writer’s life. Baca’s story, Coming into Language is an example of this as at the start it refers to how Baca had no real prior experience with literature and how important it ended up being to him within his life. This correlates to myself in the way that my Father and Mother made things very clear how important reading should and would be for me throughout my life. I was always constantly told at any point I could ask my Mom or Dad if they’d read a story with or for me.  When I began to actually be able to read by myself and being in the position where I was at my Father’s house, I’d have two to three mandatory thirty minute timed session worth of reading. Sometimes I’d turn the egg timer down a few minutes, sometimes I read even after it went off. Although Baca unfortunately never had such luxurious opportunities as he was resigned to a less enjoyable method of learning about language which happened to be within the prison system. Within his metaphorical and literal prison, he learned the importance of writing and reading. Literature filled a void in his mind and his heart. "

Original Conclusion Paragraph

"Like Baca, language was something very important to me as it made me understand

myself better and those around me. Story telling from either media, poems or any form of

literature or language has the unique capability to make an individual think about multiple

aspects of their lives. One of the many gifts literature gave to me was the ability to understand

my own stories and how often they were relatable.  Due to either fun or unhappy experiences,

events throughout our lives allow us to appertain to others regarding their worries and joys. This

trait of literature also happens to work in both ways where the reader can relate to the text itself

allowing for a great deal of entertainment and escapism. Overall literature allows us to grow

ourselves and understand the perspectives of the many people around us and before us in an

educational and often fun way."


Revised Conclusion Paragraph

"Like Baca, language was something very important to me as it made me understand

myself better and those around me. Story telling from either media, poems or any form of

literature or language has the unique capability to make an individual think about multiple

aspects of their lives. One of the many gifts literature gave to me was the ability to understand

my own stories and how often they were relatable.  Due to either fun or unhappy experiences,

events throughout our lives allow us to appertain to others regarding their worries and joys. This

trait of literature also happens to work in both ways where the reader can relate to the text itself

allowing for a great deal of entertainment and escapism. Overall literature allows us to grow

ourselves and understand the perspectives of the many people around us and before us in an

educational and often fun way."

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